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Native English speaker, come in! What about this speech?

Please note the following speech (Assuming that the full score is 100 points). It is necessary that the test should not exceed 120 words. Strong criticism is welcome. Thank you very much in advance. Dear friends, We College students may be a way to get our pocket money from our parents, but we have several ways to use properly first, it is necessary to try to save some of our pocket money in a bank, which helps us to develop a habit of achieving savings. We find it great to draw from the Bank, if we really need the money. More importantly, we can choose to spend money Pocket books that are both interesting and useful. The more books we read, the more we know the world. Moreover, by spending money spending listen to music, watch a football game or collecting stamps, we can develop our interest in music, sport or stamp collecting. I hope we can all make better use of our money. Thank you.

"We college students may be a way to get our pocket money from our parents, but we have several ways to use it properly "I would rephrase that a bit:" As college students, we really only one way to get pocket money, our parents, but we have countless ways to spend it correctly. "First, it is necessary to try to save some of our pocket money in a bank, which helps us to develop a habit of economies "Using" save "and" save "is a bit repetitive." First, we must learn to put aside some our money in the bank to help us in the future. "" We'll find a great draw for the Bank, if we really need some money. "Why would it be much to withdraw money from the bank? I could go on, but it is your word. I think the main thing is that you try to go into too many ideas in such a short speech. I'd like to try to focus more on a single topic, perhaps the benefits of putting money the bank or how spending money can help us grow. Is it the theme "How to use the pocket money better / wisdom"? Because I did not really until your last sentence. If that is the designated topic, I think you should focus more on its implementation to the bank and maybe add something about the decision of whether you should buy something or not.

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