Pocket Watch With Chain
Please give strong criticism about my poem?
Gold Chains pocket watches slipped your arms like a golden snake abroad. Until you have forgotten to breathe on the selection and sank in their lives take on blackened you thought yourself the charmer stocks and shares and snakes Yet, as you stopped flute for the breath, they tightened the waist. You manicured and chained with twisted Forgetting how quiet restraint you like wrap yourself in your constraints. You need your gold pocket watch in 24 carat cold. How do you love when the fault check when you have forgotten how watches like Great big foreign snakes can swallow up whole lives
Very good! My suggestions are: Define the "twenty four. I think it will be better. "Restraint" and "restriction" is so similar meaning that it is a repeat, not a rhyme. The rhythm of the verse beginning with "Need" is awkward, but I am not so sure it's bad. The last line "to a whole" has connotations which are undesired by the gross. Is one your best I've seen.
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